Monday, May 18, 2015

DMC: "Siren" by M. H. Barnes





SIREN

Siren is a
screaming word, a
bleeding word, a
needing word.
It lives
in the
place
between
hopeful and hopeless.
Wakes in the night
to answer
the call.
Set fire,
it rushes,
urgent and wailing, a
nightmare, a warning, a
desperate prayer.

© 2015 Michelle Heidenrich Barnes. All rights reserved.


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18 comments:

  1. Nothing says "emergency!" like a siren. Excellent, Michelle! I like the way the shape echoes the sound.

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    1. Thanks Tabatha. It's funny how sometimes a poem feels incomplete until I play around with the shape, then it just falls into place like it was meant to be that way all along!

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  2. I agree, the shape reinforces the feeling too--the up and down of hope. I like the nightmare/prayer rhyme.

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  3. Love those first words, "a needing" says much. Wonderful word to write about, too.

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  4. Michelle, That's lovely. xoxo

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  5. Oooop, Michelle. That is really terrific! Thanks for sharing it here.

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  6. O meant Oooooo, not Oooop.

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  7. Lana Wayne KoehlerMay 18, 2015 at 4:53 PM

    Nicely done, Michelle.

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  8. The shape makes this poem more intriguing. Sirens can be so scary and yes, they are a prayer, and live between hopeful and hopeless. You captured the feeling.

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  9. Thanks so much for your comments everyone!

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  10. It made my pulse quicken in panic! Nice!

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    1. Thanks, Teresa! I was going for a quality of breathlessness. I'm glad that came across for you!

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  11. Excellent job, Michelle. I LOVE the shape. It adds so much. So proud to know you. :-)

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    1. You're so sweet, Robyn. I'm proud to know you too! :)

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  12. Nice! Right from the beginning with "screaming word, bleeding word, needing word."

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  13. This is wonderful, Michelle. And I agree about the shape...it really adds.

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