Tuesday, October 20, 2015

DMC: "Before the Last Petal Falls" by Michelle Heidenrich Barnes


"crying rose" by wolf-minori



BEFORE THE LAST PETAL FALLS

Ten years.
She is the spring
after winter’s monotonous gloom.
What right have I to hold
such a delicate blossom in my brutish paw?
Still,
we waltz,
her sweet head rested
on my
           wildly
             
                   beating
                  
                              heart.
                                                                                  she loves me…

Belle’s father is ill.
A daughter’s love is fierce —
strong enough to slay the Beast.
I lurk in the shadows
and
       watch

                  her

                              go.
                                                                                 she loves me not…

Wound me, stranger—
kill if you must.
I am already numb.
Though the last petal
barely clings,
beauty still lingers.
She is in the library,
sitting down to supper,
walking in the garden.
Her gentle voice…
her voice...
                  I hear

                              her

                                              voice!
                                                                  she loves me.

© 2015 Michelle Heidenrich Barnes. All rights reserved.


Marcus Ewert has challenged us to write love poems this month– about relationships that seem unrequited, but which end up being requited after all. Click HERE for more details.

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31 comments:

  1. Beauty and the Beast expressed so beautifully!

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  2. How very unexpected! Nicely executed, too. Well done.

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    1. Thanks, Diane. Unexpected is what comes of two weeks of torment, not knowing what to write about! (More about that on Friday.)

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  3. Great take on a classic story and scene!

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  4. This is beautiful I love how you cared the love me love me not through the wind and the flower and ended with loves me very beautiful

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  5. Very nice, Michelle. Did you know that Emma Watson is going to be Beauty in an upcoming movie version? One of my kids is super excited about it!

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    1. No, I didn't! I'm pretty excited about that, myself. Thanks, Tabatha.

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  6. It really is one of our love stories for everyone. You've written it beautifully, Michelle. I love the format.

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    1. Thank you, Linda. Formatting is never something I think about when I start writing a poem, but it always feels like a gift when it "falls" into place. ;)

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  7. You know it's a good poem when you slave over it, but no one can tell. It seems effortless. This is a good one!

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    1. Love the longing you display in both verse and form here. There seems to be a reaching with the format that underscores that emotion. Well done!

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    2. What nice compliments, Stephanie and Damon – thank you!

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  8. Wow. What a lovely take on Beauty and the Beast. Thanks.

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  9. I love the desire in this poem, movement with words and physically, and then hope at the end. Such a rich piece!

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    1. Thank you, Michelle. It's always satisfying taking a poem out of my mind and letting it "play" on the page.

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  10. I love the comparison to the seasons Michelle=>She is the spring after winter’s monotonous gloom.
    This line and other presents a beauty-a delicate blossom.

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  11. This flows so beautifully from season to season and emotion to emotion! .How I would love to see it become part of a collections of children's poetry about classic fairy tales.. What a delicious plate of love that would be :)

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    1. And what a scrumptious comment, Sarah. Thank you!

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  12. There are no words to express the beauty of this poem!

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