LIFE LIKE STORY
~with a line from "blurred lines" by Lil Fijjii
I’m asking you to listen,
No derision, as I try to
Be true, peel off my
Life like story.
And if
I drift away from you,
So blue, you can't
Judge or rant, just
Sit in my dust, must listen
Until my mission becomes clear to
You, no fear of you, and why my
Life time has always been in rhymes.
© 2018 Donna JT Smith. All rights reserved.
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Love the inner rhyme, reads like a rap, a "must" read aloud, Donna! I like the message, too! Well done!
ReplyDeleteVery nice, Donna! I keep coming back to "...as I try to/Be true, peel off my/Life like story." Love the idea of being able to peel off the layers of our lives in poem after poem.
ReplyDeleteThat's my favorite part too!
DeleteYou always find a way to rhyme, Donna. This inner rhyme is delightful to say aloud. Listen you must, sit in my dust!
ReplyDeleteI love the rhyme, Donna, because it sounds like it is coming straight from a young person who likes to rap or sing to music. Well done.
ReplyDeleteGreat emotion and young adult voice, Donna. I could hear the strong, voice shining in those words. And ditto Michelle and Rebekah.
ReplyDeleteThank you all for "getting it"! This is unlike anything I usually write, but it just came out. The rhyming was a fun departure in its placement. I was hearing the rap in my head as I "transcribed" it. Lol!
ReplyDeleteNice work, Donna - I was so impressed with this young poet's poem when I first read it; glad to see it received more tender attention in this way from you.
ReplyDeleteI like your rap poem Donna–great rhythm!
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