Ice Cream in Summer
I lick, lick, lick my ice cream cone
But somehow one
Drop still
Slips
Past my sticky
Finger-
Tips.
On my shorts it
Drip, drip
Drips.
© 2014 Miranda Barnes (7th grade), all rights reserved.
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Very cute!
ReplyDeleteWow, Miranda, that's great! I'm still trying to figure out how to write a zeno. Do I start with finding three rhyming words? (Where's my rhyming dictionary?) Or do I start with a subject and try to fit it into the form?
ReplyDeleteFor me, I thought of doing ice cream (probably because I wanted some right then :] ). Then I thought of drip, drip, drips as the last lines and went from there.
DeleteI think a trip to Cold Stone Creamery may be in order. ;) Really nice job, honey.
ReplyDeleteMe too! Yum.... :)
DeleteI would never have known that was written by a 7th-grader!
ReplyDeleteTerrific poem, Miranda! I like all your ick/ip sounds (but am sorry about those drips!)
ReplyDeleteThanks, everyone! :) I actually kind of based it off a few days ago when I went to McDonald's and got a dipped cone. The guy put way too much ice cream on the cone and the chocolate part was all that was holding it together. There were lots of cracks, though, and the ice cream kept coming out like a leaky faucet. It was really good, but it took me ages to eat!
ReplyDeleteReal life informs art. Your poem is drippily delicious.
DeleteGreat little poem. Thanks for sharing it here.
ReplyDeleteTerrific, Miranda, rhythm & rhyme. I too like that you wrote from an experience & made it work so well.
ReplyDeleteI love that!
ReplyDeleteMiranda, you are a natural poet!!
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