Tuesday, April 19, 2016

DMC: "Water of the Earth" by Lani





Today's ditty comes from Lani, a talented 4th grade student in Mrs. Simon's Sea. They have been using model poems to write every day this month. Lani explains how she wrote her poem:
I wrote a reverso poem about water from the book, ''Water Rolls, Water Rises'' [Pat Mora, Meilo So; Children's Book Press, 2014]. It was a lot of work but I went on thesaurus.com and found synonyms for all the words I wanted to replace. Here's my outcome... 

WATER OF THE EARTH

Water whirls
Against the waterfront
Beneath the sun, beneath the moon
Throughout our spiral galaxy
Water Rotates, Water Rises
Under gold sun, Under white moon

Under gold sun, Under white moon
Water rotates, Water rises
Throughout our spiral galaxy
Beneath the sun, Beneath the moon
Against the waterfront
Water whirls


© 2016 Lani. All rights reserved.


In celebration of National Poetry Month, Marilyn Singer has challenged us to write poems inspired by the word "echo." Click HERE for more details.

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8 comments:

  1. Wonderfully done! I love all the action you've put in about water, "swirls, rises, rotates".

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  2. Great job with this poem, Lani! We can learn so much from other poets... I learn that way, too. The effort you put into choosing your words has definitely paid off.

    Mrs. Simon may have already told you this, but one of the things I especially like about your poem is that it looks like the sunset (or moonrise) reflecting on the water. Thanks for shining so brightly in school and allowing Mrs. Simon to share your work with the rest of us!

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  3. Well done! Reversos are challenging to write.

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  4. This is beautiful. I love the rhythm in it...it feels like water feels, lapping and soothing and so strong. And that title is powerful. Water is proud of this poem. xx

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  5. A very sensory poem. I love the way the longer lines suggest a stillness around the movement of the water - all this going on under the calm watchfulness of sun and moon. Lovely.

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  6. Beautiful Lani! My kids are crazy for reversos. They will appreciate your poem and your process. Thank you for sharing.

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  7. makes me imagine the toe words are waltzing around each other Beautiful



















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